Lillie McFerrin hosts a Five Sentence Fiction competition on her blog. This week’s theme is Abandon. Here is my entry, which is inspired by the picture this week:
by Dr. Mike Reddy (@doctormikereddy)
“Ooh, heaven is a place on Earth…” a distorted Belinda Carlisle squawked, “They say in Heaven love comes first, Ooh Heaven is a…”. Ellen removed the Walkman’s thin metal framed, rather grubby orange headphones, and absently hung them round her neck while she took in the scene. An abandoned church, as many were now in the South Wales valleys, sold now, but clearly in need of more love and attention than she could possibly give.
Hidden demons dined on the strange depression of this particular corner of Hell, which Ellen had conjured up to be her eternal, never ending loop of torture. After a few seconds, it started again, “Ooh, Heaven is a place on Earth…”
5 thoughts on “#FiveSentenceFiction – Abandon “””
I wonder if Heaven is indeed a place on Earth. A powerful story.
The song! What a perfect repeating track for one little corner of Hell. I really like your story. Do you plan to make it a longer piece, or leave it as it is?
I liked your description of Ellen, and I can appreciate the scene with the old chapels in the valleys…
Cool, and spooky at the same time.
it’s pretty cool.